Unrequited Love

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  • Love
    • nini2323
    • I once knew everything, and now I know nothing.

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    I just found this....

    Unrequited Love

     I miss him, It was only for a few hours, meaningless, but felt deeper there in the nest we built.
    He held a part of me together gagged and bound with ropes made of something softer than me
    His hand in my hair felt like autumn air acid swirled leaves in cylones bringing me back....
    He touches the small of my back...the tension falls away...
    Candy-coated this webs weaved around our bed,light sparkels in kaliedescope eyes
    White powdersblind me he looks like a thin piano player with eyes like the ocean changing blue to green muddy brown....I don't remember
    His arms are flawed but he is not...

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    SuSpence commented on Unrequited Love

    04-27-2010

    Dang nini, I love this one too, a lot! I cant quite put my finger on it, but you really have a way of drawing the reader in, hanging on every word leaving them unable to read the words as fast as they want to take it all in, this is a special talent. You are fastly rising on my list of favourite poets here :) -Spence
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    nini2323

    04/27/2010

    stop you're makin me blush lol on second thought keep talking lol

    n9ne commented on Unrequited Love

    11-04-2009

    I'm luving this poem... definately takes me to a different place... a memory... and at the same time, though i feel i would like to know more, i appreciate where it ends... Master piece... You Go Girl ;-)
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    dumplin commented on Unrequited Love

    11-03-2009

    Oh, this should have been much longer. You left me hanging wanting to know more about him, about your love, about the story of it.
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    bforibus commented on Unrequited Love

    11-03-2009

    i love the surreal undertones of this poem. the stand offish feel that the character had in this piece. it felt like the character was remembering this at a distance. so great twist via poem and title. loved it.
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    CHOK commented on Unrequited Love

    10-28-2009

    i love the depth of this poem, took me to a special place. What a masterpiece.
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    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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