Waiting

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Waiting

                        
                             Feeling like wet sand, dripping 
                         Spellbound in my thoughts, tripping 
                        Sense of loss, stripped, ever gripping 
                      Vanished focus, outside energy, seeping 
                        
                          Wondering, altered states, reaping 
                        What new direction follows, peeking 
                         Shallow anguish, relentless stealing 
                          Skin crawls with torment, grieving 
                        
                        Reaching out for a savior, screaming 
                          Purpose calls out, for it’s meaning 
                       Time is no more, a new era, gleaming 
                         Resolve brings forth subtle dreaming
                                         -M. Jacobs

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BringMeBullets commented on Waiting

02-11-2010

Your style is magnificent! Like nothing I've ever seen. You are an inspiration, my friend! Thank you for sharing.

danmartyjake1

02/14/2010

Thanks Bullets! I appreciate your awesome compliments to my style. It makes me feel very gratified that you have enjoyed some of my poems and please feel free to read more and send your thoughts my way. I learn from other poets and I have enjoyed your fine writing, as well.

Artie commented on Waiting

02-09-2010

I like how each line of this, triggers a different feeling. It's reads in a very random way, but also works as an entire piece. Well done - 10 from me

danmartyjake1

02/10/2010

Thanks for finding "Waiting" I appreciate your comments and staying in touch with me on your thoughts about my poems. I value your perspective very much.

StandingBear commented on Waiting

01-30-2010

Quite a philosophical work of a mixed myriad of raw, naked emotions descending .. "feeling like wet sand" .. waking in a calm dream on an isolated beach .. very far away. You are a Mensa member! Great! Thank you dmj1 for your vote per my poem : The Final Decisions per week 4 per the survivor contest. This poem is the actual January Poet Of The Month winner though not recognized.

danmartyjake1

02/01/2010

Thanks Bear for your thoughtful perspective on "Waiting", I appreciate you stopping by my page and checking mine, too. I will back to read more of yours.

jyothi commented on Waiting

01-22-2010

A women feeling's observed in her writings.An inspiration for new writers. Jyothi

danmartyjake1

02/10/2010

Thanks for your comments, and I am so happy to be inspiring others.

knight4696 commented on Waiting

01-19-2010

Another very nice write Marion! I love the last lines ... - Reaching out for a savior, screaming Purpose calls out, for itâs meaning Time is no more, a new era, gleaming Resolve brings forth subtle dreaming! - Excellent! :) Ken

danmartyjake1

01/20/2010

Thanks Ken for your supportive thoughts and for checking out "Waiting".

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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