WHEN I DANCE

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  • ladypooh
  • I am back,stronger and better. I have truely missed everyone,and I will be writting soon God bless each and everyone.

Poem Commentary

Thia is a rewrite. to the first write of (When I Dance). I needed to put some real work to it. because when I first did it, it was a rush job and it showed.
and I apologize to my readers. and I hope you enjoyed the rewrite.

WHEN I DANCE

When I dance, I have my wings
my mind is at ease, grace surrounds me
and all is alright with me.

Solace and peace I recieve,because
Demons, they leave.

Chains are release, my soul
is happy and free.

When I Dance


Miracles I see, For there's a new me

Heaven smiles back
and the lord is well please.



When I dance, a new song my heart sing
then a beautiful image manifest
before me

with angles encamp around about, I spread my wings
 give all of me, to perform a sweet melody, with
the flux of my wings

To glorify the lord of lords and king of kings

And the world can't stop me, for it's all the praise
stored up in me

When I dance

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cmlestrade commented on WHEN I DANCE

08-02-2009

My daughter is a praise dancer and runs the dance ministry at our church. Don't know what it is but when they begin dancing God takes over and when I look at them it's like they forget they are dancing for themselves and remember who truly is Lord of the dance. Your poem put words to that feeling. I must show this to all of them. It's beautiful.

ladypooh

08/02/2009

Thank you for your comment and please show to whom you like again thank you.

optimistic commented on WHEN I DANCE

07-23-2009

I thought this piece had a beautiful release of passion for dance.

ladypooh

07/23/2009

Thank you for your comment. although I'm not really sure which write you have read because it has been redid. but again thank you.

frog commented on WHEN I DANCE

06-18-2009

Although I enjoyed the concept of the poem, I became distracted by the repetition of the word dance.

ladypooh

07/23/2009

Thanks frog for you insight to this poem,it has been ask of me to redo and I take great pleasure in redoing this poem. and I appreciate you help. God bless you

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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