worlds collide

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    several of us have a forum called DANCING WITH A POET.  this is a response to all the posted poems thus far.  anyone interested in participating is welcome to check it out...the idea is collaboration...either poem for poem or stanza by stanza.  whatever works.  I'd like to thank everyone who's posted so far...I've had fun...writing, reading and responding...

    worlds collide

    his eyes devour my movement
    from across the crowded room
    he's denying the compulsion
    that he knows will be his doom

    he struggles with temptation
    though he hasn't got a chance
    his surrender is inevitable
    but then we dance

    a stranger keeps a lonely watch
    enchanted by flash of skin
    the lithe and supple shape of me
    stirs longing deep within

    enraptured by undulations
    that throb in time to the beat
    bespelled by magic dance
    feels impassioned burning heat

    in the silence of the music's pause
    a hand stretched in invitation
    a slow dance with a gentle man
    seeking inspiration

    he guides the graceful sweeping steps
    and sets a kinder pace
    romancing me with waltzed restraint
    and desire writ on his face

    the room is filled with whispered sounds
    as the musicians stop to rest
    I claim an empty bar stool
    while my eyes take up their quest

    eye's like embers meet their match
    and flare with hot desire
    a wordless understanding
    called the silent dance of fire

    the band, renewed, begins a tune
    and I feel a cooler gaze
    assessing if the time is right
    to finally make his play

    as we dance he whispers
    every word I say is true
    more than dance or quick romance
    I'm about to love you

    my hand slides a long goodbye
    as the song is winding down
    and is quickly claimed by the next in line
    a legend of great renown

    he's captivated and entranced
    as together we breathlessly twirl
    he'll deny his raging need
    to try to win this girl

    and when our dance is at an end
    he'll tempt me to end this night
    but still another waits his turn
    for a dance in soft moonlight

    as I accept in gratitude
    I hear ferrari in words of prose
    where he thinks he's taking me
    I'm sure God only knows

    I'm up for a drive by now
    to rest my tired feet
    and adrenaline I do confess
    always gets the best of me

    but faster than that ferrari goes
    his hands try to make free
    and I don't dance the way he wants
    so I'm stuck on an empty street

    wistfully I wander when a hero happens by
    on an amazing two-wheel steed
    he tells me strap the helmet on
    then makes me taste his speed

    returned late to my favored place
    smiling thank you for the ride
    impulsive turn for one last look
    with sweet wine in my eyes

    as I enter in the dance hall
    I see the lights are dimmed
    the band is long departed
    no dancers left within

    in the center of the dance floor
    alone I slowly turn
    shuttered eyes imagining
    the one who'll make me burn

    the silence breaks upon the sound
    of a footstep on the floor
    a quiet voice is asking
    if I'd like to dance some more

    behind closed eyes I'm dreaming
    as firm hands caress smooth skin
    and playful lips plant kisses
    up my neck, and down again

    fabric mutely whispers
    as I melt in your embrace
    a shallow breath acknowledges
    matched longing in your face

    awe-struck wondering eyes meet
    to speak the danger of desire
    unspoken words that echo
    but will never quench this fire

    let the darkened dance floor witness
    our surrender to temptation
    the taste of you upon my mouth
    love's truest conversation

    soundlessly we're moving
    to a rhythm we both crave
    and though there is no music
    still we are it's slave

    through beams of shining starlight
    we're a dance of perfect grace
    the pulse of life now harmonized
    your arms my safest place

    a private world of stillness
    while inside our worlds collide
    you've renamed me your Beloved
    and it cannot be denied

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    latinangel commented on worlds collide

    08-10-2009

    Wow! What a breathtaking poem. You have a wonderful way with meter and rythym. Its a very beautiful tale about the dance. It makes me think of huge ballrooms and big ballroom dresses. I absolutely love it.

    JCKasper commented on worlds collide

    07-31-2009

    An epic filled with great passion _______ Enough to take anyones breath away. An amazing story about ' The Dance '

    Shadow70 commented on worlds collide

    07-28-2009

    Great poem. You do a wonderfull job of painting a picture. I was watching your film play in my mind...awsome.

    ginga commented on worlds collide

    07-27-2009

    tender this is a captivating dance for sure. I sit here thinking of the movie Dirty Dancing which for its era was erotic as your poem is too. What an intense and steamy story line. Very charismatic! ginga

    jademelissa74 commented on worlds collide

    07-27-2009

    A passionate piece indeed. The imagery used here as usual, flawless! You are indeed a great poet. A ten from me.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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