You Offend Me

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    You Offend Me
    I’m offended by your presence you provoke
    me with a smile
    I felt you as you chose me all my senses went so wild
    I am not interested in meeting you I feel your body draw me nigh
    I hear you voice sing out to me from deep inside your thigh
    I will not turn around to see what makes me feel so good
    Cause when I smelled you soft sweet scent my plight was understood
    I vision you in all my dreams your being has form and shape
    But if I leave now my heart will frown but at least I will escape
    But right now while I still can choose to reject what is fate
    Lover to lover I must admit that I want you on my plate

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    BrittKun commented on You Offend Me

    11-20-2009

    I understand temtation. It is sometimes very hard to say no to somethim\ngs but be strong in God. Exelent poem needs a little work on the flow of the words. But still the concept ins very strong.
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    LadyEniAnah commented on You Offend Me

    11-19-2009

    wow very good.. a love hate thing going on there as i see it... every well put
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    Luscious40 commented on You Offend Me

    10-29-2009

    I loooooved this poem, mainly because I can read between the lines. Been there before.. I just made a choice.. Great poem.
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    christliked

    11/05/2009

    Not all people can read between the line and realize that I want your emotions and good stories are not always truth or even suppose to be, thank you

    BoSweets commented on You Offend Me

    10-29-2009

    This is a very nice love poem.... thanks Peace BoSweets
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    RJK commented on You Offend Me

    10-26-2009

    Well this comment thing gets hard some times. I think you had a chance to write something very personal yet giving us a peek at a first incounter. But I belive youended up going left of that. I would say go back and try it again. Not dising you just think it could be so much more. Good luck.
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    christliked

    10/26/2009

    dont always measure styles based on your own and try to expand your understanding this poem is very simple and you missed it, I suggest you read Your So Vain

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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