love fades to destiny

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    love fades to destiny

    I remember the way looking in to your eyes. I could get lost for days in those eyes. I try not to sit around and wander why. Some times I feel like I could break down and cry. Your touch as soft as a warm summer day. Your kiss as quenching as a cold glass of tea on a warm sumer day. Your smile could hypnotize. I still remember what it,s like to hold your hand. But nothing went the way I planed. I don't know why I tried so long. I don't know why I wanted u so much. Im just glad of all the good times we had. So theirs no use in being sad. Over it now,not even mad. I wish I could tell u the way I feel. But I just don't think u could deal. I wish I could go see u. what would i say what would i do

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    amillz09 commented on love fades to destiny

    05-06-2009

    this was pretty good. something i kno i could relate to.

    jabotee commented on love fades to destiny

    05-06-2009

    This has a good foundation. My view looks at repeats and flow. Transending feelings to words, flowing through the universe to calm the weary soul.

    artist4fun commented on love fades to destiny

    05-06-2009

    I like what the poem is about I feel that you should write it with more semetry and rythem and ckeck your spelling all and all with a little revamping it could be a realy great poem

    deej commented on love fades to destiny

    05-06-2009

    Definately something most of us can relate to. I think it could use a sequal. "What would you say? What would you do?" That would make for interesting too. I liked this one.

    Nishini commented on love fades to destiny

    05-06-2009

    I think that this could be an excellent poem if you went through, edited the spelling and grammar errors, and added some new phrasing where you have over-repetitiveness. Over all it's not terrible.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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