Yours.

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  • Love
    • lebara
    • just waiting for the boring introduction of the story that is my life to end

    Poem Commentary

    this is sorta the revised & editied version. my original was way more chilidish/kiddy. thank you thesaurus.

    Yours.

    Shall i compare thee to a summer's day?
    No; thats sound too much like shakespeare.
    Yet even though you weren't written into a play,
    You're more amazing than any line or poem i'll ever hear.

    More inspiring than a clear winter morning,
    More extraordinary than a star filled night.
    Your skin so cozy it's almost alarming;
    I find it hard not to hold you so tight.

    You may be asking yourself why i'm telling you this;
    that you're amazing and more unique than the stars shown.
    Well, it's pretty simple really. What i'm trying to say is
    That i want to be yours, and yours alone.


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    JaleesaSoco commented on Yours.

    02-11-2010

    I am in love with this poem. This is very gentle and it makes me feel like....awwwwwwwwwww. lol. Good job. Really good job. :)

    KtIrish commented on Yours.

    11-02-2009

    This is awesome. It's very frank and direct. Honest and simple. Very well written.

    ginga commented on Yours.

    11-02-2009

    lebara, I like that you lay your heart on the line. I also like conversational style poems. Keep up the good work. Write often and with joy! ginga

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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