Ambush

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    Ambush
    My deadly love
    inject your poison
    silky, smooth as a viper
    Merciless with my heart
    devastating with your strikes
    And, I believed you
    you know how I wanted to...
    believe that you could love me
    So, I made my reflection lurid;
    long legs, slight hips,
    curving breast, pouting lips...
    distorted by bliss
    Then, I yearned for redemption -
    with-held by a twisted desire
    to hold you close
    And, I choke on a vacant soul

    Leah Spatafora
    12-20-2008

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    danmartyjake1 commented on Ambush

    02-23-2010

    Short with provocative message and meaning in the words about souls and the quality of them. Well written.
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    Loke commented on Ambush

    01-31-2010

    I think your poem is cool, quite motivating actually!
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    dragongirlie

    02/01/2010

    Hi Loke, I looked back on this piece after reading your comment, and the only thing I can find motivational is that yearning for redemption. I have days though, when I wonder if it is even possible for any of us to trully be redeemed. As I told Ginga, I actually wrote this piece many years ago; and, I have outgrown much of the childish thoughts of a girl (I hope). Though I like to keep myself up, I don't find the need to use my looks as a tool any more. Funny thing is, all these years later my deadly love has come to be my one true love & he tells me I'm beautiful on days I am most plain in my own opinion. Peace be with you...

    Loke

    02/23/2010

    I re-read this poem. I think inspirational's a better word!

    ginga commented on Ambush

    01-27-2010

    dragon, "and I choke on a vacant soul" does it for me. Such a punchline so to speak that ends a mesmerizing poem. ginga
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    dragongirlie

    02/01/2010

    HI Ginga, there is an empty feeling that comes from going after a person who has demons, but love isn't logical. Love does have the power to heal deep wounds though. My fiance Michael and I are about to celebrate seventeen years of loving and laughing. Michael just celebrated 15 years clean too. I wrote this piece many years ago.

    knight4696 commented on Ambush

    01-01-2010

    Very Nice write Leah! Dark and sexy... Just the way I like! :)
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    cliftondurant commented on Ambush

    11-17-2009

    this is a beautiful piece i love it keep writing you got talent thanks for sharing
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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