Dreaming

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    I don't know if this is real. It doesn't feel real and that bothers me.

    Dreaming

    It's as simple as her face.
    if it's happy, it's real, unless she's looking at me.
    It's as simple as her words.
    If it's serious, she's real, unless she's looking at me.
    It's as simple as her hair.
    If it's blonde, she's real, unless I'm wrong there too.

    It's hard to see
    Hard to be
    in a world which
    could be or switch
    back to thee
    without a ball or a tee

    Confused and wretch,
    my mind plays fetch with my desires
    I'll never forget those irises
    an ethreal blue and a wave of green
    those irises, her irises make it my dream
    If I see them it's worth it
    if I don't then I forfeit
    there's no point in winning a game with no prize
    especially if it costs you your eyes. 

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    dahlusion commented on Dreaming

    01-22-2013

    This is structured beautifully and flows like warm water—Bravo! "there's no point in winning a game with no prize" —this is wisdom!

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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