Alphabet Soup!
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Well now, here is the man who said he'd never make it through the alphabet and you even went beyond! Amazing what a devil woman can do to us, ain't it? |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Hey gogant you and I the two "gg's: have made it through the alphabet! I guess we can form words after all...who would of thought? Poetry rocks! |
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RE: RE: Alphabet Soup!You're right, ginga....... Quote:
Originally Posted by ginga Hey gogant you and I the two "gg's: have made it through the alphabet! I guess we can form words after all...who would of thought? Poetry rocks! ginga  |
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RE: Alphabet Soup! Just so you all know I posted this acrostic challenge on my page and advertised a bit in the commentary. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!I have attempted to construct an acrostic as the last letter ever received by a young lady, from her mercenary lover, in the year 1456. Please be kind, as I am unfamiliar with the meaning of the words: Iambic, trochaic or anapestic. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Excellent topic and the ABC's innovative and clever. All in all, very nice work, sir. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Ok, I've got to try this. Last edited by Londo 07-27-2010 at 11:19:27 PM |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Hey, Londo....tell you what. I'll give you an A for the idea. Using the letters to describe animals is very, very clever! |
There was no meter, the syllable counts were wrong, it's "hurdles" instead of "hurtles" and you tried to fudge a bit with using "Wally the walrus waddled along, making Alice a bit mad" as an addition to a line, instead of it's own line, in order to preserve the ABC's. Shame, shame, shame 
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Well, I'm not so sure about the animal crackers. I think they got soggy in the soup. I just wanted to pass on the info that BVenture has retired, and as one of his ghost writers, I was the one that wrote 'A Good Day To Die'. I'm glad you found more enjoyment with that one, although I now suspect you will find several flaws it that one, as well. LOL Oh well, nobody's perfect. |
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RE: RE: Alphabet Soup!Well, I have been pondering if there were actually ghost writers he mentioned in his email to me.....when I saw you post that poem a while ago, I began to wonder what was up, I'm afraid to say I was thinking the worst, but I am glad you cleared that up.....but would you care to share why you had him posting your work under his name, and the others were they doing the same as you...well if you want to let us in on it,,,,,,,,just curious Quote: Originally Posted by Londo Well, I'm not so sure about the animal crackers. I think they got soggy in the soup. I just wanted to pass on the info that BVenture has retired, and as one of his ghost writers, I was the one that wrote 'A Good Day To Die'. I'm glad you found more enjoyment with that one, although I now suspect you will find several flaws it that one, as well. LOL Oh well, nobody's perfect.     
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RE: RE: Alphabet Soup!Quote: Originally Posted by Londo Well, I'm not so sure about the animal crackers. I think they got soggy in the soup. I just wanted to pass on the info that BVenture has retired, and as one of his ghost writers, I was the one that wrote 'A Good Day To Die'. I'm glad you found more enjoyment with that one, although I now suspect you will find several flaws it that one, as well. LOL Oh well, nobody's perfect. I don't understand your comment, unless you feel I have a personal vendetta against you or something. That's too bad. I'm here to write poetry, not get involved in petty exchanges or personal intrigue. I stand behind my critique and was respectful in stating it. Have a nice day. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!No such thing intended. Just having a laugh. Sorry if it was misconstrued. My thought was this: Both poems penned by the same writer probably had the same types of gaffs. The more somber of the two may have distracted you from looking for syllable counts and accents, which i feel is what a good poem should do. I have not gone back through 'A Good Day To Die' to count the syllables per line. I think that if a poem moves a person and is an enjoyable read, the technical aspects are overlooked, unless someone is intentionally looking at the poem for technical accuracy. Sorry, I didn't mean to ruffle any feathers. - Londo Last edited by Londo 08-05-2010 at 08:18:38 AM |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!BTW, I was also a poor student in high school. I recall my days in the A Capella. On my report card I got an A-, and under remarks it said, 'Does not put forth any effort.' |
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RE: RE: Alphabet Soup!This is great! Quote:
Originally Posted by Londo Ok, I've got to try this. Alphabet Soup w/ Animal crackers Alice the aardvark led the parade Billy the bear, close at hand Charlie the cheetah ran in circles Dancing around the grand stand Every summer in mid-July Forty minutes past just enough Groups of animals all come here Head down Main Street to strut their stuff I couldn’t believe my eyes Just marching right down the street Kangaroos and kinkajous Lined up for children to meet Mabel the Moose was on the loose Not to mention several otter Oscar the octopus slithered Pale, like a fish out of water Quite a few animals seemed to be lost Running around and some jumping hurdles Some rabbits were racing with tortoises Though I think they were really just turtles Under the bright yellow sun that day Very much fun was being had soon Wally the walrus waddled on by Xylophone playing seals tapped a tune Yes, people came from far and wide Zack the zebra brought up the rear Alice was pleased with her following But was sad the end was so near  Four won't go into twenty-six evenly. I had to add two more lines to work this out. Better? 11:15 PM revised once more.  |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Londo, the first poem you entered in one of my classes, I had this reply.. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Cool! No problem here. |
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RE: Alphabet Soup!Balladeer . . . |
Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.
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