Picture Poetry anyone?
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You And Me In The MoonlightQuote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The full moon rises o’er the bay The still night air is cooling Your naked silhouette glistening As I sit here, drooling Walk round to my other side Let the moonlight bathe your breasts Then come lie down beside me I’ve shooed away all the pests Just you and me in the moonlight Beside this crystal bay Holding each other through the night Is where I long to stay 
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?
Mr. Moon Oh, Crystal Ball up in the sky Can you tell me why? I know you hold the answer My heart can’t bear another lie! I can’t hear you, Mr. Moon! Only the crying of the loon I’m afraid I’m going to break Reveal something to me soon! I hear the whisper of the lake The gentle splashing of the wake But the silence from Your glow Is almost more than I can take Hence the night becomes surreal Somewhere deep inside I feel You spreading peace and warmth The awaited sign that I will heal! Last edited by julieannetx 01-07-2011 at 08:34:05 PM |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?I admire the animation attributed to the moon! Such things, as we conceive them, are clear to us as to intention, then we must question if the images evoked by this arrangement of words, will affect the reader as hoped---congratulations for hitting the mark (no pun intended)! Writing in the box, and going with the inclinations of the moment, is not always the best result, but you have navigated the photography with grace! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Thank you Marsink! I am honored by your comments! You are right...we never know if the reader is going to truly grasp it... I consider you one of the greats on this site...and I feel like I'm doing it right when you say good things! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Julie, perhaps you should entitle your poem....just a thought. |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Close Your Eyes Close your eyes, my love, as you lay with me We can choose this moment to be blind. The ground has trembled beneath our feet - We fell into this untimely grave. Choose now, my love, to redefine those powerful tremors as music for us. Remember how the sky was blue? Remember how my hand held yours? Darling, reach for me, be closer. I need your arms around me, I need your final breaths to warm my face. Take comfort, love - together we will sleep. Can you, please, just whisper to me? It’s dark and I am feeling scared. Can you feel my eternal embrace? Lean close to me so we can say…goodbye. |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?To Marsink: |
I did kinda overlook that didn't I?
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?To Kah: |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Thanks, Julie~ I enjoyed your poem on the moon picture as well - especially that last stanza! Nice |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Thank you Kah! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?The picture is very complimentary to your poem, Kah!! Great work!!!!!!!!!!!----I was going to write on that next, but with you in the room--I think its doomed!! lol! (Don't have that much time before I leave for the day, anyway) |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Thanks, Marsink! I'm thinking of writing on the picture of the moon next... |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?I Can't Let Go Embrace our fears to face forever. Stone and earth fills failed frames; Woven together, eye to eye, smile, Love-locked, entangled: history’s claim. Moments escape to shout our dreams, love. Sudden, surreal, solemn sweet whisper: Your arms, inviting, shield from death’s blast; Eternal flower, I can’t let go. Whether days or eras awaiting, We are not lost to war’s dark despair. A love like ours, blessed awakening; The searchers keep antiquities’ care. |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Moon lit night Calm in presence and still as the water a glowing light that shows nature's anaphora am artistic freeze frame done by hands not human yet reflects what humans feel before they know it intelligence gathered is a journey taken moon, when did you capture my face? How did you know I would be here? the silence in the answers leads to understanding thank you nature for being a mechanism to cope, of hope First attempt at this and I came to the conclusion when finished this is not my strong suit lol |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?To Marsink: Last edited by julieannetx 01-08-2011 at 07:59:17 AM |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by Marsink I Can't Let Go Embrace our fears to face forever. Stone and earth fills failed frames; Woven together, eye to eye, smile, Love-locked, entangled: history’s claim. Moments escape to shout our dreams, love. Sudden, surreal, solemn sweet whisper: Your arms, inviting, shield from death’s blast; Eternal flower, I can’t let go. Whether days or eras awaiting, We are not lost to war’s dark despair. A love like ours, blessed awakening; The searchers keep antiquities’ care. Wow, Marsink - wonderful job. Especially like the line "Eternal flower, I can't let go". 
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?I am semi-comatose and did not see your comments on this piece. Thanks Kim! Thanks Julie! I changed a word or two, so I am posting to my page to collect cyber dust. |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Wow- I'm so glad that all of you are having as much fun with this as I am. |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 Wow- I'm so glad that all of you are having as much fun with this as I am. I read all the poems on here and really enjoyed them all. Writing on the fly is a hit and miss thing. Not all of what I post here is on the fly. So don't feel pressured to do it that way if you don't want to. Ready for more? Bring on the more
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The Ride Of Your Life A single ticket for a single ride Everything you need can be found inside There will be things unseen surprises abound ups, downs, curves, and thrills so hold on tight, or be thrown around Try all you want with plans you make there are many options and many paths to take Some focus on the scenery and some on the speed Some try to slow it down and some grab away with greed Some ride with focus and others without a care Some want to sit still and others try, to go everywhere So ride as you want until your heart is content When your ride is over all you will have, is what it meant |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Good job! Enjoyed your interpretation! |
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The Coaster Ride The sign said, ‘You must be this tall — In order to board this ride.’ So I stood high up on my tippy tiptoes And about my height, I lied The walrus-mustachioed carnie Had seen this ruse before He tapped my heels with his cane Bringing them to the floor “You’re too little to ride this.” He said as he shooed me back “But I already bought the ticket.” I said and pulled it from my pack. “I don’t care,” he told me It’s too dangerous, by far “You’ve got to be 48 inches So you won’t fall out of the car.” So I ran home to get my bike It wasn’t very far I’m just the right size to ride a bike But, too short to drive a car. 
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RE: RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Quote: Originally Posted by RPT40 The Optimist Hail to thee, oh optimist! Methinks it’s looking not so good You might rethink your strategy Yes, I REALLY think you should! Optimists CAN be realists… Are you certain you’re prepared? The odds aren’t in your favor, Why do you not look scared? Could it be that your equipment Might not quite be up to par? Lo, the distance to the bottom It sure seems a bit too far! If the downhill you did conquer I foresee the incline overwhelm, Yet I must abide by your decision, Alas, the captain at the helm. With only seconds now to spare, please don’t wait ‘til it’s too late! Escape while you still can I can’t bear to see your fate! |
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RE: Picture Poetry anyone?Very cute! |
Poetry is what is lost in translation.
Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.