iREALized

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    • geminiSoFYE
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    Poem Commentary

    this poem is to my past so i no longer look back at it in regret but in regards to wisdom& knowledge i have acquired and more to obtain.

    iREALized

    funny how the times change and the world is steadily turnin

    all along the way my soul is readily learning

    soaking up wisdom like a old maid's kitchen rag

    seen the good the bad the ugly
     
    seen happiness along with sad

    but i realized through it all i changed too
     
     from young to grown and from old to new

    my spirit, mind and soul took its tole to mold me

    and here i am today standing strong and boldly

    i remember way back when i did what i felt and thought it felt good

    now i do what i need and do only what i should

    i realized life is too short

    at times we believe we have all the time in the world

    til you realize that time waits for noone

    so I have now realized the key to life

    live to learn learn to love & love to do whats right
      

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    Cosmos commented on iREALized

    06-04-2009

    I enjoyed this poem. I feel like it really has a lot of potential (and I say this because I seen that you said its unfinished in your comment) I like your intelligent and unbounded views on life and learning (personal evolution, if you will). My only advice would be to shave as much as you can down. Take some of the ideas you have and try to compact them down to short, concise lines (this is the hard part). I really like the overall feel of the poem, but try and leave some room for the imagi

    geminiSoFYE

    06/05/2009

    thank you sooooo much for the advice i truly appreciate you insite and will imply it into my work i do have a BIG imagination i guess thats why i have so much to say LOL but you are sooo right i should leave some room for the reader to explore their own... much love & stay tuned Have a BLESSED day!!!!

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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