Knives

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  • jazzia
  • just making through life like any other teenager

Knives

Blood bleeds
  down
and then tries
to fill the
holes
but when a
heart treis to
use it
take it
the knives
those damn knives
take it and let it drip
down
to the damage
but
not quickly
they want you to
feel like you have a chance so each
drip
it huets when it
slowly one by one
drip
drip
drip
but the heart
saves what it can
but its not enough
``the blood can`t stay.``
the knives tease you
``you can`t do
this`` they whisper painfully
``we control you and love now will never
be whole again.
so get over it
i will let you love
again
you can try and that poor kid
you`ll hurt him, but we?
yes we will hurt you worse.``
so we give up but i have
to fight for something
more
but it`s my heart
and i was stupid because...well
I listened.

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WordSlinger commented on Knives

07-09-2009

This is original, and spellbinding. The poem captured me. I admire this style, and it's all yours, :)

pumaheart commented on Knives

06-25-2009

Wow, only 14 and writing well. The most important thing with poetry is that the reader is able to feel what you feel. And that you've got down pat. You might add a little more description about how "they controlled" you. That part of it gets a little bit confusing when you try to relate it to the theme of "knnives" Keep up the good work, I see you have some real talent in there.

jazzia

06/25/2009

thank you i will do that ive read your poem and i thought it was great !!

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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