Nothing New Under the Sun

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  • Allwhethergirl
  • is glad to have written this last poem, glad that it is how I feel, more myself somehow

Nothing New Under the Sun

When the sun comes up,
it’s always a new day –
another chance to
say what you need to say.

Be a better you,
who makes the best of it.
Smiling all the while,
just want to make things fit.

Still Night ever falls,
no matter what you try.

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jescherr commented on Nothing New Under the Sun

07-03-2009

Good thought process. It reads a little clunky. Expand!

Allwhethergirl

07/04/2009

Thanks for your advice. This was a 4am spinout, and I was actually feeling pretty clunky when I wrote it so I wanted it to sound that way, off-putting, leaving off the send rhyme on the last line, cutting you off as you read it... But yes, I agree with work this could be much better! It was just somethng I jotted down and figured I would finally use this account and post one!

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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