Us, Rewritten

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    Another tidbit from that troubled relationship.

    Us, Rewritten

    Lately the sun's been hiding behind the clouds
    and the rivers are extending their boundaries
    the days pass easier with a symphony of pills
    and the aid of your voice on my cell phone
    forgive my shortage of character and courage
    for my slumbers are spent reliving times I've tried to forget

    So lie to me, I don't believe in memories
    the past is rewritten by what you say
    I'll take your words as my past
    and plan my future with lies that last

    Lately I've been searching for my treasure
    please present yourself and take cover,
    for the war has started with the enemies in my heart
    their guns loaded with procrastination
    and bombs disrupting the life of your great nation
    you might as well surrender cause they're not giving in

    So lie to me, the truth is born from tragedy
    the past will die from what you say
    won't you take my life in your hands
    and piece this mess into something we can understand

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    sanctus commented on Us, Rewritten

    02-22-2011

    so direct and to the point, very well written....................

    andy2103

    02/22/2011

    Thanks.

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