Your Turn

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    Poem Commentary

    Started off as a song, then fell apart as I went, so i just kinda turned it into a poem. :)

    Your Turn

    I didn’t mean to leave you holding on.
    On and on. It shows.
    On and on. It grows.


    I never meant to leave you there alone.
    Gone. You’re gone. You’re gone.
    Drawn. You’re drawn. You’re drawn. 

    To...

     Darker days
    Your dismay

     You’re falling to pieces
    And I’m all your reasons.

     Shot like a dart.
    Straight for the heart.

     And now I’ve left you.
    Now I’ve hurt you.
    So I’ll just leave you.

    Leave you to sew up the scars.

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    HIP13044b commented on Your Turn

    12-23-2010

    I like what you've got here. I can see how this would be a good song. I don't think it fell apart, just needs some fine tuning. Don't give up on it.
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    nuclearsunshine

    12/23/2010

    Thanks :) I am planning on working on it more, glad you liked it and thanks for the encouragement

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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