a gentle awakening.

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inspired by a magnetic poetry challenge created by Tracey Love on facebook. The Challenge was to write a poem that had these 3 words: PROUD, AWAKENING, and MESMERISING

a gentle awakening.

"I'M A PROUD PARENT OF AN AUTISTIC CHILD"

(read the sticker on the bumper)
made my great depression seem less than mild

left my black clouds to dance off the stage
dwindle into the night

for i caught a glimpse of true beauty,
a wasp in the lamplight.

please hold me close for as long as you can.

if you can't, no worries
i'll understand.


i was far more appreciative and grateful
less agression
less hateful

over annoying people
of the morning commute
the kids who text in theatres
fake emotions through computers
and hello kitty sticker pictures

it was easy to be displeased
by the shit that swims in the thick breeze
but as the tear fell down my face
on that isolated holiday

a mezmerizing emotion broke through the floor board opening
like a sweet yet subtle uprising slowly floating over me

left me honest and shaking
a gentle awakening
when usually sadness would do the undertaking
dressed in crisp tuxedos with bright white gloves

because there's no better gift
that you can give children
than a parents unjudging love.

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Musicmaker43 commented on a gentle awakening.

07-29-2011

This is beautiful! You clearly have a way with words that is so elegant. Well done :)

lonewolf commented on a gentle awakening.

05-12-2010

this is an awesome poem. unjudging and unconditional. love in its purest form

susanismith commented on a gentle awakening.

04-15-2010

Beautiful!!! I'm in awww right now with this poem. The rythum flowed so harmoniously. It is so true about a parent's love and how unconditional and unjudging it truly is. As parent in general I know that feeling all too well. To me a child (autistic or any special needs) is a gift from God showing us the innocence that remains and shows us true angels here on earth. You show honest compassion and it shines through your poem. With your other poems your heart aches and with this it thrives in a different way. Again, another great read from a great poet.

Kitiara commented on a gentle awakening.

04-08-2010

oh yes, I love it ! I am a parent of an autistic child as well. Unconditional love is felt here. the gift you are givin is an amazing one and I can tell by the way that you write that you truely mean it when you talk about unjudging love. I know not how to really judge love I have always been open to arms to most that come into my life. I know this uncondtional love and feel it in the depth of me. The vibration of this poem is a passionate one. I am so glad that I read it.

danmartyjake1 commented on a gentle awakening.

04-08-2010

Excellent POem. I loved this! Keep working your style is terrific!

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