Broken Pieces


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i couldnt really think of a good title 4 this poem but when i do i`ll change it .

Broken Pieces

i never felt this way about another girl
commercial face, magazine body looking like a [cover girl]
at 1st she`ll be my undercover girl
till` i discover that i love this girl more than any other girl
just be my friend & my lover girl
not your man , cuz` understand in the end you are just a girl
and i am just a man , that understands a girl
who needs a man that needs a girl to help share his [world]
but truthfully the [globe] is "broken up to pieces"
where the eqautor splits is where we are keppin all the secrets
and the ocean is the tears, the land is the pain
we barley see the sun & we cant stand when it rains
i`ll hate your ass at times but i`ll love you just the same
you`ll play me , i`ll play you like love is just a game
plus we are just the same, hottest out without a flame
picture perfect couple with no film and not a frame . . . . .

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AmadeusEx commented on Broken Pieces


was this written about anyone in particular? i like some of the imagery, especially rhyming equator splits with secrets...i guess thats about it, its not really my kind of poetry, its more like rap...nice flow though

grandis commented on Broken Pieces


Very could give The-Dream a run for his money.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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