Do you even notice?

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  • Lost Love

    Do you even notice?

    Do You even Notice?

                                                (what u did)    

    I feel like I've seen you before,

    It was that time I heard a knocking on my door…

    But as strange as it seems,

    I don't recognize you anymore.

    You're not the same one from my dreams,

     the one I used to adore.

     

    It's confusing yet alluring

    how you even make my sentences sound like paradoxes.

    And yet you just think it nonsense…

    I linger on the thought of finding a way to the old you

    The one whose smile is as fresh as a morning's dew…

     

    That laugh, it sounds so familiar…

    Come closer and let me hear you…

    I sense a tone of excitement in your voice,

    Oh how I wish I could drown the rest of this noise!

     

    But wait, you're leaving me now. But how?

    Can't you remain here for just a little while?

    Stop!

    Hold me one more time… lie to me.

    Let me live, if not forever… just for now!

    Oh but I see, it's not with me where you want to be.

    I'm not the reason for your smile,

    Now I realize I'm not even worthwhile.

    Farewell, it was nice while it lasted…

    I'll string my heart upon a fishing line,

     and you'll just watch with that sweet smile as I cast it

     

                                © GRELii & JoGa ®Salazar. Oct. 2007

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    jademelissa74 commented on Do you even notice?

    07-07-2009

    Truly deep, richly poetic! I love the sense in which you portray each line. It feels so real top finish reading the poem. Awesome!

    JoGa

    07/08/2009

    thanx for your comment.

    cmlestrade commented on Do you even notice?

    07-06-2009

    I liked this because I think this happens to everyone at one time in their life. I was a little confused because as I read it aloud I wasn't quite sure if it was rhyming poetry,free-verse or rhyming free verse if there is such a thing. it was just a little hard to determine the rhythm. Even though the theme for your poem is Lost Love it embodies a lot more. acceptance ,growth and triumph. the voice says I'm begging you to stay but an underlying tone seems to come through that says "Ok I am moving on, I will survice. great effort.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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