Explorer

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Inspired by the Mars Explorer.

Explorer

Piercing into night,

With roaring thunder

And supreme intent.

 

The programmed command

Shedding metal skin,

Turning then burning.

 

Here begins the dance.

Mathematical,

Purposeful falling.

 

Chartering the void

Amidst whispering,

Radio guidance.

 

Until at it's feet,

A backdrop of red,

mountainous splendor.

 

And the new species

Compartmentalized,

Awaiting command.

 

Leisurely unfolds,

while gathering sun

And awakening.

 

Behold the landscape,
dusty, desolate
reddish rock and sand.

A stretch of the legs,

Motoring forward

Cautious and precise

 

Distant observers

In rapt enthrallment

Treading paths unseen.

 

The discovering

Of new landscapes by

Remote chartering.

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dewachen commented on Explorer

06-05-2009

Wow, interesting poem this must be related to the mars rovers. I wonder how far we the human race will advance if we can learn to live with one another and start looking at the bigger picture. I liked your poem unique and distinctive from others I have read.

StandingBear commented on Explorer

06-04-2009

Quite a space odyssey flight that has become reality. "It's eyes shift about. Streaming images of fascination". Great verse, great write. 10

thoughtsaflame commented on Explorer

06-03-2009

Very nice...precise. Why you said your talent was lacking I'll never guess. I found your imagery very succinct and delighted in your subject. A nice layout, as well. Thanks for sharing. :o)

Cosmos

06/03/2009

Thank you fo your feedback. It helps a lot. I guess the reason I question my talent is because I want to be better. I always question the way in which a poem comes out of me, because it is always just a shadow of the pure form it holds in my mind. After writing it..., it summons that emotion to me, but I always question whether or not Im inspriing that in the reader. It means a lot that a poet of your caliber can appreciate my work. =)

jademelissa74 commented on Explorer

06-03-2009

Great Topic! The Mars explorer revealed the effects of wind and water. I believe that the data show water repeatedly came and left billions of years ago. It was suggested that the wind persisted much longer, heaping sand into dunes between ancient water episodes. These activities still shape the landscape today. Great Job! Very Interesting! :))

Cosmos

06/03/2009

Thank you very much for your comment. I was starting to wonder if anyone was going to appreciate the idea. Althogh the excecution could probably use some work. Thank you

Richisfun commented on Explorer

06-03-2009

Wow! a different kind of poem, I loved it, i was`nt expecting such and that made it interesting, keep up the good work and i will wait yr new one ! hehe

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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