Do you like my form?
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Do you like my form?Write a tanka. |
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Re: Do you like my form?ok kids...here is my attempt. |
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Re: Do you like my form?Here is a tanka I wrote quite some time ago which was published in Japan along with some other poems. It was published in English and Japanese in a poetry magizine; the translation into Japanese was by Rinzu Shimizu San Editor of a poetry magizine in Tokyo call Booby Trap. Traditionally the Tanka deals with a nature theme but it doesn't have to in the English language. |
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Re: Do you like my form?Thank you for posting this. Just lovely. |
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Re: Do you like my form?This syllabic form can also be used as a stanza form. As well as the 7/5/7 haiku form. Tanka can have the stanza form of haiku added to it by another author or even many authors. A poem can also alternate between tanka and haiku forms as stanzas. Collaborative poems are common place in Japan. |
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Re: Do you like my form?Firdt I want to say what a great idea! June and Peat your posts are wonderful to read. |
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Re: Do you like my form?I hear them calling me |
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Re: Do you like my form?Ok I'm hooked; Last edited by wheelsal 07-09-2009 at 11:28:13 AM |
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Re: Do you like my form?Light Last edited by Paolo 07-23-2009 at 12:19:07 AM |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by Paolo Light The breath is lost in these fevered gasps at lovely lights threading through a branch spills in yellow on the grass shines on water as if glass Let me know what you think. I love your 2 posts Paolo, they are mesmerizing.  Ginga
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Re: Do you like my form?Ginga you are too kind. Last edited by Paolo 07-09-2009 at 08:08:43 PM |
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Re: Do you like my form?One of my favorite styles... |
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Re: Do you like my form?I am strength from you |
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Re: Do you like my form?Red Apples Last edited by Paolo 07-21-2009 at 09:26:43 AM |
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Re: Do you like my form?i researched TANKA and discovered TMI and extended info on similiar type poetry. One fact about TANKA of interest was that it was done before the HAIKU indicating an ancient art of language. |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by RHPeat Here is a tanka I wrote quite some time ago which was published in Japan along with some other poems. It was published in English and Japanese in a poetry magizine; the translation into Japanese was by Rinzu Shimizu San Editor of a poetry magizine in Tokyo call Booby Trap. Traditionally the Tanka deals with a nature theme but it doesn't have to in the English language. ============= Thin sky (An English Tanka) Amazed in bare woods, stern wind captured in branches, I listen—thin sky. Assault in winter shadows, I feel pricked coldness. © R. H. Peat - 1/13/98 Genius is among us |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by Paolo Red Apples The red wet apples resting in a yellow bowl on the window sill glisten as with fever, in heated pitch of midday sun I believe this might be a improved version so let me know what you think. Paolo I can smell the apples wilting, and see the apples sweat, bravo! |
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Re: Do you like my form?Interesting forum...thanks. |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by JadedJezzabel I hear them calling me Whispers hovering near me Just outside my door Upon opening they flee Only to return once more ok hope you like it.......nothing to do with nature except maybe the paranoia of human nature And... I get chills this is what it is all about and what less than human nature? |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by FindingJune ok kids...here is my attempt. he's given me roots i lay likewise beneath him the scent of lilac tangles itself in my breath my heart free as the sparrow Love it, but I have heard a lot about lilac here on O.P. what is it with the lilac? lol! Where is lavendar, where is spice? love you June |
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Re: Do you like my form?line 1- 5 syllables Last edited by laydbak1 07-23-2009 at 09:43:38 AM |
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Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by laydbak1 line 1- 5 syllables line 2- 7 syllables line 3- 5 syllables line 4- 7 syllables line 5- 7 syllables Alright... I've never heard of this tanka form... The word sounds a bit like the Native American word they used in "Dances with Wolves", for buffalo; TaTanka...!!! Hey, Let me give this form a little try here... I bet I can write one of these things... 5 I've taken the trail 7 Way more times than I can count 5 Yet, I am puzzled 7 Why, after countless trips there 7 I forget to take paper There, that wasn't so bad... Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.........  Yes, you can write, well, hmmm... I suppose, but can you feel it? Answer: Nah, For some reason I don't find anything Native American done in ridicule funny but then again, I have to remember the source that spoke... Last edited by Angellightwolf 07-21-2009 at 11:16:17 PM |
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Re: Re: Re: Do you like my form?Quote: Originally Posted by Angellightwolf Originally Posted by laydbak1 line 1- 5 syllables line 2- 7 syllables line 3- 5 syllables line 4- 7 syllables line 5- 7 syllables Alright... I've never heard of this tanka form... The word sounds a bit like the Native American word they used in "Dances with Wolves", for buffalo; TaTanka...!!! Hey, Let me give this form a little try here... I bet I can write one of these things... 5 I've taken the trail 7 Way more times than I can count 5 Yet, I am puzzled 7 Why, after countless trips there 7 I forget to take paper There, that wasn't so bad... Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee......... Yes, you can write, well, hmmm... I suppose, but can you feel it? Answer: Nah, For some reason I don't find anything Native American done in ridicule funny but then again, I have to remember the source that spoke... I mentioned a phonetic similarity to the word I heard used in the movie for the poetry form word; tanka... There's nothing funny about it, nor was implied by it... I have no idea what you're talking about... The poem itself was intended as light humor, and it is totally unrelated to the remark about the similarity of the two words... As to the rest, I have little doubt readers here will have any problem seeing the credibility in what you profess to know with such authority, about what other people feel in their writings... Last edited by laydbak1 07-22-2009 at 12:31:50 PM |
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Re: Do you like my form?serendipity Last edited by ginga 08-08-2009 at 09:19:39 AM |
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Re: Do you like my form?5 I am on repeat. |
Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.
Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.