i'm finally comming home

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    this i wrote of about a man who loved and fought with his mind and heart about two woman he loved... one woman who promised him everything....... and the other woman he promised everything !! his mind wanted riches but his heart wanted love ...

    i'm finally comming home

    everything seems so wrong
    but this i've always known.
    been away from you so long
    i'm finally comming home.

    i was searching for some magic
    that took me far away.
    nights and days turned tragic
    as nothing came my way.

    fell into a deep sleep
    and was with the devil all night.
    we fought about who to keep
    i won ,and knew i was right .

    i awoke miles apart
    in darkness filled with fears.
    it was your loving heart
    that i longed to be near .

    you who i kept thinking of
    the one i left all alone .
    returning to you my love
    i'm finally comming home .

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    princesita commented on i'm finally comming home

    05-18-2010

    so you loved two women??? and who are those women??? coz you told me im the love of your life!!!! nooo,,,now you have to add to our lil girl coz she is a woman too!!! ke no???

    Chaos128 commented on i'm finally comming home

    05-13-2010

    Cool exposition, P. Your protagonist realized that the road to nowhere is littered with the ghosts of those who couldn't bring themselves to admit they were headed in the wrong direction. Hard 10!

    koolmom0 commented on i'm finally comming home

    04-27-2010

    This is beautiful...A person can be so far out of reach in so many different ways; but coming home always has the same meaning. I'm glad you came home my friend. Oh and by the way, I'm part Native American too:) Kool

    Musicmynded1 commented on i'm finally comming home

    04-27-2010

    Nice, well rounded and straight to a happy ending point. I like it, and nothing needs fine tuned on it.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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