Just a Loan

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    Just a Loan
    Darkness crawling inside my mind,
    eating memories, rendering me blind,
    all gone, memories, nothing can I find...

    Carved empty inside, pain veiling my sorrow,
    sorrow veiling my pain, I am feeling so hollow...

    Sea of tears, drowning all, life is just a loan...

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    PamelaALamppa commented on Just a Loan

    10-06-2009

    Pure sorrow speaks in these words of yours. Life is a loan, of time and space to fill with whatever we choose to fill it with. Of course it always offers us those less and desirable gifts at times. Well done. ~Pamela
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    Artie commented on Just a Loan

    07-10-2009

    ...and we are on borrowed time. Lol - nice!! I like the way you establish tone. I related to this one, by envisioning the darkness as the fear of passing time.
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    AbysmalGoddess commented on Just a Loan

    06-29-2009

    This is a beautiful expression, it went straight to my favorites!
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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