Masking Her Fate

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A woman falls into the sea and experiences death and drowning

Masking Her Fate

Overboard,

she fell to the sea,

the rails gave way,

and it wasn’t where she wanted to be,

to get back on the ship,

she didn’t know how,

the sea supported her now,

rocking her gently with the waves,

drowning was coming

as she prayed for a save,

the waters lulling her into a trance like state,

masking her fate,

the crimson sunshine offered warmth,

a kind gesture but much too late,

she could sense its radiance,

even through her closed eyes,

then there was a thirst,

an awful thirst,

she heard a voice, softly at first,

maybe the family she loved,

she saw an angel, or a dove,

then the voice again,

but it didn’t come from above,

it came from somewhere deep,

then she realized her spirit was asleep,

her mind would weep,

then ghosts came in many voices,

and death offered her no choices,

her eyes flashing red,

salt burning, her life turning,

as the voices in her head

were calling out in unison,

then the voices became whispers,

and the whispers turned into cries,

fear became despair,

as she finally dies.

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CasimirJash commented on Masking Her Fate

10-26-2009

wow, great poem, love the imagery and rhyme, it's wonderful, you are very talented

Atanacio

10/26/2009

thank you so much

optimistic commented on Masking Her Fate

06-04-2009

I can feel the pain. I like the unique Imagery! This style you caved in and kept me until the end of the poem great job.

Atanacio

06/04/2009

thanks that was so cool of you to write

Atanacio

06/04/2009

thanks that was so cool of you to write

Atanacio

06/04/2009

thanks that was so cool of you to write

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

Atanacio’s Poems (43)

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In A Cool, Dry Place 0
Masking Her Fate 2
Complete The Beasts 0
Souls Sang 2
Guilty, And He Knew Why 0
Eyes Smoldering 0
Quiet The Cries 0
A Slim Figure Rising 0
He Sensed Defeat 0
Calm Passed 0
Marched Briskly 0
Trinity Sunday 1
He Stood In The Shadows 0
Familiar Stranger 0
Ocean Air 0
Earthbound 1
Into Glazed Eyes 0
Proof Of God 1
Peculiar Brush With Death 0
State Rested 0
No Sign Of Regret 0
First Kiss 0
Asphyxiation 0
Condemnation 1
Her Emotions Were Mummified 1
No Kingdom Come 1
Deck Red 0
God's Eyes, Grim 1
Floated To Heaven On A Dream 0
Nothing More Than A Dream 0
A Flamboyant Amber 0
Life Fell Prey 0
Emotions Sift 0
The Silence Was Unnerving 0
Die... 0
This Game 0
Only A Voice Mail 0
A Flamboyant Amber 2
Soft Kisses 1
Ghost Shook Her Head 1
Exhilarating Freedom 0
Muted Chatter 0
Putting Death On Hold 1