SECURITY

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    This poem was written with my late husband in mind. Hope everyone likes it....

    SECURITY

    When you hold my hand
    it feels so right
    you were the missing piece to my complex puzzle

    There was nothing I couldn't confront
    there was no one that could stand in my way

    Except one, who would of known
    the person I least expected
    the first I should of watched

    Maybe it was a mistake
    maybe it was too soon
    it should of been overlooked
    you should have stayed be my side

    It was a different kind of love
    maybe one I couldn't compete with
    obviously I lost, lost everything that meant anything and everything to me

    Everything seemed too perfect
    too perfect to be true
    Maybe you were too good for me
    and I wasn't good enough for you

     I walked through freezing temperatures
    walked through unknown territory
    alone yet at ease cause I knew you were at the end of my journey

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    SuperChick76 commented on SECURITY

    10-06-2009

    Nicely written, and good word choices. I'm not sure if it was a supposed to rhyme or not, but if it was you should work on that. And I found the flow a bit hard. You should go through, condense some lines, expand others, add a few, just to make it flow better. Good job, though, just needs a bit of work here and there. =D

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