The Other Guy

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    (some people want to know what inspires me so I will try to fill the commentary section out from now on.)

    I was reading mcross's "lets go to subway" and it inspired me to write my own little lovers triangle poem. This is the result.

    The Other Guy
    I was at that church,
    Invitation wanting,
    Ability to let go lacking.
    Figured I'd come in ,
    Sit for a while.
    Then I saw him.
    The guy standing in my place.
    A smile on his face,
    I tried so hard to hide my eyes.

    I imagined this moment,
    Inside of my head,
    Giving reasons
    These two should not be wed.
    Except it was him in this pew
    Watching tears he would spew
    As he kissed my bride goodbye.
    Now it is me they see,
    Sitting here as I cry,
    The loser -the other guy.

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    MCross commented on The Other Guy

    12-10-2009

    I am honored that reading my thoughts have inspired you.
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    Derico commented on The Other Guy

    09-14-2009

    Real rhymic and surreal. A well painted picture. Good tone!
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    DennisScott

    09/14/2009

    Thank you for your comment. I enjoy honesty.

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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