the package

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    please go easy on me this is my second writing and critics are welcome i put another writing in but  its not here don't know what went wrong hope you like this i just write hope its not too bad

    the package

    the package came today the one i wished never would come but here it was. seemed harmless enough brown wrappings black lettering quite plain.with shaking hands i carried it inside laid it on the table .i untied the string holding it with shaking hands tears blinding me ,as i opened it and touched the contents with numb fingers ,a pair of dog tags,a picture of me, and a stack of letters i had written to him not much left of a life i thought there should be shattered dreams in there a lots of tears and regrets but there wasn't just a few simple items i closed the box numbness  in every part of my body i felt i was playing out a bad dream but this was real he wasn't coming back i will never feel his kisses vor arms again i put the box up in the closet in a dark corner a piece of my heart is closed in that box i will survive but with a piece of me missing

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    poetrygal45 commented on the package

    07-06-2009

    So sad, loss is never easy and when it is a lover it seems to linger differently then a child or parent or friend. For they never kissed your lips or made love to you. this kind of loss is loss in its deepest sense. oneness has been broken..

    sorrow5

    07/06/2009

    thank u so much for comment it was appreciated thanks sorrow

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    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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