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  • Inspirational

    unfinished
    you make numb when the times are right

    you make me forget when i've had a bad night

    you keep me a float i this world so high

    i dare you touch me i dare you to try

    the more i take of you the more i need

    the less i take of you the more i bleed

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    Charlie23 commented on unfinished

    09-06-2009

    This is an amazing poem, comes across to me as a spiritually inspired poem!
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    Alone commented on unfinished

    06-10-2009

    I am personaly a fan of the shorter poems. i like to write them because they seem to leave the reader wanting more and it seems to make them think about the situation more than a poem that drags on for a page.
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    dmann commented on unfinished

    05-10-2009

    i can relate this poem to my addictions
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    xxlheart commented on unfinished

    05-06-2009

    okay so this is my very first read of your work and this is my worthless opinion. you seem to have a lot of life and pain in your heart and this piece only scratches the surface. can't wait to read more of you. i love "real-life" poetry. a small suggestion would be to keep it raw and straight from your heart without thinking. it shows you have talent and passion. very nice write!
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    lonewolf commented on unfinished

    04-25-2009

    very good. wish there would have been more though
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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