When I get old

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    • sher92
    • "then she closed her eyes found relief in a knife the blood flows as she cries"~ between the trees

    When I get old

     

    When I’m old

    No more uncertainties about my existence

    No more painful memories to penetrate the foundation of my spirit

    No more self-hatred or damnations to my soul

    When I’m old

    The shards of my shattered self-worth will no longer mutilate my love for life

    No more drowning in the epitomy of my sorrows

    No more being trapped in the dismal abyss of my adolescent mind

    When I’m old

    No more angst over worries that aren’t my own

    No more pinning over the habitual stereotype I was forced into

    No more facades to satisfy the hypercritical world

    No more confusion to cloud my disposition on life

    When I’m old

    It will be a time to indulge in my secret wants and whims

    A time to be released from the incarceration of my thoughts

    And most of all a time to forgive, forget, and set ancient grudges free

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    phatdaddee commented on When I get old

    11-27-2009

    Fogive but don't ever forget. Forgiving frees your soul but forgetting sets you up to refill your prescription to pain! Wonderful poem, insightful and amazingly wise for such a young person. Don't let your creative spirit get crushed by the pursuit of DINERO!
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    JadedJezzabel commented on When I get old

    07-10-2009

    hardest lesson i ment to say hardest lesson..............
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    sher92

    07/10/2009

    lol thank you for all the comments! I do the same thing if I forget something I'll go back and write it. Yea you have a realy great point. And yea I've learned that latley, if you don't resolve an issue it only festers within you growing worst and worst. The poem is ment to be exactly what you said, an ideology. What felt like a fantasy at the time and hope for the future. When I wrote it it was kind of my hopes for the future my hopes that I could get my life and issues together. But i realy love your comments and insight on life!!

    JadedJezzabel commented on When I get old

    07-10-2009

    p.s. what you do today.....how you live right now has a direct affect on who you will be tomarrow and the quality of life you will live.........thats the lesson I've ever learned but once I learned it and lived it........things got better.
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    JadedJezzabel commented on When I get old

    07-10-2009

    great poem its flawless in its structure.....but out of the mouths of babes....the message of how you think you will be when you get old is in my oppinion idealistic. issues don't just dissapear with adulthood..........any issues you have left unresolved or not dealt with with your self and how you view you.....will only becomes greater with age.......getting old is not the great liberator.....being wise does not always come with the added years...any thing and everything you do in life any fears you overcome any issues you are able to let go will be due to the determination and the strenghth and deveopment of your own character.......real growth doesn't just happen with the passage of time it is something we have to work at every day.....you are on the right track with a creative voice that cries out to be heard and appriciated.......be proud of you keep the different little drummer in you safe from harm and celebrate him everyday for that is who you are. the only real sin in life is that which is done against what you believe to be right in your heart.
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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