a dream

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  • itzamateo
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Dreams,  Epic,  The World,  War,  Alone, God,  Truth,  Nostalgia,   Darkness.

a dream

a dream
I hear my name, a voice floating distantly through the mist, just behind those blackened trees, leaves faded away long ago, Ithought I had left the other world for good, the destruction and chaos had finally annihilated the futile corrupt ignorant rot.  I thought that I had found salvation in ostensible insanity, and deliberate isolation, but through the gray mist I heard a voice which bore my name, though I could not call the voice my own, unless it had been reversed as it was reflected off the floating mist, mist, reflecting all I knew, if not understood, and that was my only my identity.  It bore my own name, but in the wonder of the moment, and the abandonement of the situation, I had not realized that I had been calling out to my self, and I stared in the direction of the imaginary voice with disbelief, though still walking toward it with detrached curiosity, until I came across a skeleton clinging persistently with a bony hand to a low branch on a tree, so that it hung lifelessly there with a bent leg bones resting on the ground.  I did not conssider this to be my reflection, and I continued in the direction of the voice that called insistingly toward me, untill I came to a pond which called me toward it, there I saw a figure semililoueted against the gray-white sky, like the blackened trees around me, I peered deep iinto the deep reflection of the sky from which I heard my name called out, I looked deep into the figure, whose lips were moving, forming the syllables of my name, I recognised the figire from the other world, I met the figure as I leaned over to the surface of the water, and I drankfrom the lips that formed the syllables of my name, flowing down my throat as I drank from the pond that reflected my solitude against the gray white sky.  
 Mateo I. Centeno (c)1996

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nonners commented on a dream

11-08-2009

wow great imagery! I loved it very much. wanted to keeo reading.

itzamateo

11/08/2009

cool Ishould keep wriyting!

Singcanary commented on a dream

09-13-2009

I felt your journey into abyss...your descriptive words were done well. The voice that calle to you. A few typos...but understood and done well. Bravo

JellyBeanPuddin commented on a dream

08-26-2009

That was definitely interesting... very descriptive... and wonderful :D. I absolutely loved it.

am2anangel commented on a dream

08-25-2009

interesting piece. Your imagery is very vivid. Very thought provoking. One or two minor typos that could be corrected at a later time. But, overall a very compelling piece. Well done.

Dreamer123 commented on a dream

08-06-2009

this made me want to think. but this is great. i love your words. this as so much subject to deal about. this is very interesting. this is awesome. great work. love it. God Bless you.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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