A Secret Admirer

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    A Secret Admirer
    I looked at you,

    you looked at me.

    I wondered if you could see,

    how happy you and I could be.

    Could you see us together,

    in rainy and sunny weather?

    Could you see us together,

    or could you see us never?

    I would love you,

    would you love me?

    I would love you forever,

    would you love me never?

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    FoF commented on A Secret Admirer

    03-13-2009

    This started with possibilities, but -sorry- I found it a bit overly repetitive along with an awkward rhythm. Read it out loud to yourself and give it another try.
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    solorose

    09/05/2009

    My poem "A Secret Admirer" Isn't the best because I wrote it in 7th grade. I'm not going to change it. Lol. But thank you for the advice, and yes. I agree to some point

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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