A Way Out?

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    A Way Out?
    He lies to me...time and time again
    I was a fool to think he was my friend

    He screws with me
    My mom was right...to think it to early for me to be a wife

    What can I do? Where can I go?
    I have no money. I have no home.
    Should I stay? Should I go?
    Can I brave the tide of being on my own?

    He cheats on me, then says it's my fault
    I should have been a better lover, or so he thought.

    He touches, not in an abusive way
    But it still makes my stomache turn anyways

    I don't want to be here. I want to break free.
    The only thing that's keeping me here just turned the age of three.


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    litilraven commented on A Way Out?

    09-23-2009

    nikkishaniqwa, what you convey in this poem can be felt by 10 million women worldwide. Every woman can connect with this poem, and that's a wonderful thing! You've layed your feelings on the table for anyone to read, and that is bravery indeed!! Your rhyme is good! Your meter is a bit out of whack though. I can help you tighten that up without changing the meaning, if you "want" the help. It's up to you. You can email me at litilraven@gmail.com if you choose. Keep the pen moving in any event, you have a lot of talent!
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    WordSlinger commented on A Way Out?

    03-11-2009

    A very touching poem, stay strong.
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    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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