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I haven't written anything in a while (I wouldn't call it writer's block, more like writer's distraction), so I've been seaching Images all morning, and saw this one, and here's what I wrote.

Dive

 

Confined to the surface

of laws and rules,

conforming to the ways

of patterns and schools,

am I destined for greatness

or being led by fools?

 

I search for reality

in the core of illusion,

I shuffle through the masses

fighting fear and confusion,

no room to move

I yearn for seclusion.

 

The limits of gravity

I willingly defy,

hoping for a glimpse

of creations eye,

I conquer my fear

and dive into the sky.

 

 

 

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jeanpnkldyg commented on Dive

02-21-2011

"Dive into the sky"..... A divine image! I'll be back for more!

Mareann commented on Dive

01-17-2011

A delightful read for sure, I'll be back to read more from you soon... great job with this! Mary

JadedJezzabel commented on Dive

01-14-2011

very creative .....to be inspired by an image is very different from the way i write.......but i like it......gonna try it.

danmartyjake1 commented on Dive

01-12-2011

Great format and flow, i like the honesty and truth in this poem.

shallenemcgrath commented on Dive

01-05-2011

The last line is the best part...............................................

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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RPT40’s Poems (10)

Title Comments
Title Comments
Dive 22
The Line 10
The Remnants Of Today 19
Eternal Embrace 22
The Vision 20
The Ride Of Your Life 25
The Eyes Of Madness 18
Tomorrow 15
Clearly Thinking About Confusion 14
The Current 14