Family -of- 8

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Hidden in misery, is loves mystery

A families struggle

Family -of- 8

8 peas in a pod
8 and not a minute late

And dad could,nt care a
Flackering, flickering, fret

Love had a hidden hope
Mother barely to cope

Father was a wam,bam
No thank you mam, man
We did,nt mean a ding, dang, thang

Twyed twit-ed tongue as we
twyed speaking, why they all laughed
when we spoke
There seemed to be a quiet joke

The family with no such luck
Welfare was our only buck

What was given
Was a cheated living

They all had a hunch
As we took the free lunch

Stinking bail bonds to be
We were not free

No gifts, no hugs
no love, no hope
It look as if, not from above

8 stranded, struggling, strings
Hoping for just little anythings

Fusses and fights
darkness lived
Until one seen the light

Loves forgotten hope

Mothers stood the test of time
With her strength at length

The Tied bagan to turn
Speech classes were casted
The kids out lasted

Now looking back
The things that could have hurt
Only seem like dirt

We speak not with a forked tongue
We washed our face, hands and arms
We now cause no one harm

family still together like
Birds of the feather

You hurt and broken ones
Its all purposely done
Your loved from the dung

Take your pain and sorrow today
Turn it into a song to sing tomorrow
and help those that follow

Remember when its all said and done
The final fickle fate will not show up late




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Worthless commented on Family -of- 8

03-03-2011

I can realate to alot of that. My mom died when I was 12 and my sisters 2,3 and 4 and i have 4 older brothers. And i swear the county i live in is the absolute worst one in the united states with their so called INjustice system and all... Well written..

Krystle commented on Family -of- 8

01-26-2011

I like this piece!! It's very uniquely written great job!!!

kpeery09 commented on Family -of- 8

12-28-2010

Very Nice, it has a perfect flow of rhyme in it which is always fun. I give you 10, keep up the good work.

Richisfun

12/28/2010

WOW! you area generous man indeed, Thanks

Paolo commented on Family -of- 8

06-21-2009

I read this poem and a light is shone into the workings of a family and some of the struggles it faces. I am grateful that the author is so honest in this sharing in no word are we saved the brunt edge of of the truth, not only of how the author feels about things, but even in how it looks. If there are any weaknesses in this work I cannot find it. I believe that this is a poem that deserves debate. Thank you for a poem that not only is well written but has something to say. I will read this one again to be sure.

Richisfun

06/21/2009

Poalo thank you for yr beautiful comment, Your amasing with words, rich

SaintStoney commented on Family -of- 8

06-21-2009

Wow.. That was very insightful. I enjoyed this alot. Very unique, That is a good quality in writing. Great job!

Richisfun

06/21/2009

Thanks stoney, yr appreciated

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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