geese signing dusk: modern haiku
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geese signing dusk: modern haiku
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This is my example of a modern haiku- one that captures the haiku moment and spirit of zazen while reducing the reliance upon the "on" or syllables, most commonly expressed in 5-7-5 syllables over three lines.
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dancinghawk commented on geese signing dusk: modern haiku
02-14-2011
- my favorite dusk signature is the heron's ... but the geese call out the magic of the moment nicely, too :) nice experiment ... great "picture" :) -dh
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02/14/2011
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Stardrift commented on geese signing dusk: modern haiku
02-14-2011
- Aw3haiku, this one is an automatic classic! It also has that particular quality of making one wonder how this image has gone unsaid in this way until now. And only four syllables, lol! Also, RHPeat is of course right - though only for traditional. This one is more toward contemporary as well as experimental. So, I'm giving it a 9 for awesomeness, and an added point for extra-awesomeness - 10. Spirit light.
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02/14/2011
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RHPeat commented on geese signing dusk: modern haiku
02-14-2011
- Nice picture, I'm there. The snapshot is real, What's missing is nature's antithesis: the "kireji". Lovely nonetheless. A poet friend// RH Peat
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02/14/2011
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angelchaser commented on geese signing dusk: modern haiku
02-14-2011
- I love haikus and have been criticized for running them together to form a poem where each haiku cannot stand on its own. Most people are familiar with the 5-7-5 syllyble structure, but most don't know that different countries have different rules for haiku. Some places consider a haiku to be any very short poem, so this fits perfectly. A haiku can be only one line, it can have a different structure, not limited by syllybles. Oh well, I've ranted long enough, feel free to read some of my haikus and let me know what you think. Also, if you haven't read her, I'mStillHere is wonderful at haiku. I introduced her to them and as far as I'm concerned, her haikus outshine mine any day of the year.
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02/14/2011
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