The Garden of Grief and Toil

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    The Garden of Grief and Toil
    Salutation spoke the snake
    Your walking gait to slow the pace
    "Face this! Frail and failing humans!"
    The mob reacts with massive haste
    Displaced,
    The children of the smokestacks wait

    "Oh, how to make the heavens flee?"
    "Please dear and tell us master serpent smoke"
    Ask the shackled, tackled wrecks
    The bellowing call replies the Fall
    Breaks the absent minded cattle mass
    Scatters waves of same as all

    The frozen garden set to thaw
    The law that binds can also crawl
    From underneath to climb the free
    A light inside the minded sea

    Clobbered, this post-modern golem
    Rails against the low no more
    Mighty, muscled shoulders alter
    And all for smaller children roars
    Defend the troubled crushing sprouts
    Rearm the nightingales without
    Surround a startled president
    To ransom all of truth for rent

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    wheelsal commented on The Garden of Grief and Toil

    06-30-2009

    You are at master metaphors. I have to read everything you write several times to understand and I'm still not confidant but that is perhaps what you expect.
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    cousinsoren commented on The Garden of Grief and Toil

    05-13-2009

    (Edit: COMMENT CONTINUED) example: "Oh to make the heavens fall/ Please dear tell us master serpent smoke." and "a light inside the minded sea." Kernan possesses a rare skill of "clouding" or transforming the concrete into abstract formations. A virtue of surreaoistic/ impressionistic art , ia the freedom it gives to the appreciative reader to interpret the meaning and devices of a poem of abstractions, as the reader sees or feels , and not as the poet sees and feels , that is if he unders
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    cousinsoren commented on The Garden of Grief and Toil

    05-13-2009

    (COMMENT CONTINUED) example , "Oh to amke the heavens fall/ Please dear tell us master serpent smoke." and "a light inside the minded sea. Kernan possesses a rare skill of "clouding" the concete into abstact formations. A virtue of surrealistic/ impressionistic aret is the freedom whch it gives to the appreciative reader to interpret the meaning of a peem as he sees or feels, and not as the poet feels or sees, that if the reader understands what the poet is seeing or feeling.
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    cousinsoren commented on The Garden of Grief and Toil

    05-13-2009

    AdelKernan is consistent in accordance with his literary philosophy and insight. He states in his biography that his poetry tends to the abtract end of the spectrum. He never writes what he calls "linear poetry" "He is a mature surrealist ,but ,at times is impressionistic. At times, he tends to be morose, as in this poem, but a unique feature of his poetry is his impressive and effective yet somewhat curious and exciting metaphors, example, "Oh to make the heavens fall. Please dear , tellu
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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