yesterday, today tomorrow

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    yesterday, today tomorrow

     what happened between yesterday and today?
    they seem a little upset
    did they have a fight?
    are they still together?
    i tried asking yesterday, he didn't have a answer
    so i asked today, she merely said that was all yesterday
    she says he just cant live up to her
    but tomorrow might be a better day.

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    MOMofTWINS commented on yesterday, today tomorrow

    09-29-2009

    I dont know how many times Ive thought, " Tomorrow might be a better day..." Sometimes it is, and sometimes you'll just find yourself thinking that same thing for the next tomorrow when it isnt. A different way of writting and I like it.
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    Chaos128 commented on yesterday, today tomorrow

    09-29-2009

    Nothing is harder to navigate than the minefield of emotions. you did a very good job of making that clear here. You're writing is really spontaneous and raw, and that ain't a bad thing. I would suggest "cooking" a little longer to smooth down the rough edges a little, but the muse is definitely talking to you.
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    chubbc commented on yesterday, today tomorrow

    09-15-2009

    wow i love this poem its got a great concept to it and all in all a wonderful poem
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    Blueroad commented on yesterday, today tomorrow

    09-15-2009

    Impressive! I think you've given your reader a good chance to communicate with the poem.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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