You and me Meant to be.?

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    You and me Meant to be.?

     I see you in the hallway.
    Your teeth are perfect,
    the hair is hot!

    When you look at me,
    don't you see what you want?
    You and me meant to be? 

    I love your smile,
    them juicy lookin lips of yours.

    I know you want me too!
    But why won't you admit it.
    when I say I love you
    I know it is true
    But will we really last forever?
    Are we really     meant to be?
    I dont know
    But i like the way were going
    so say.......
    I love you too.

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    1990lh commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-22-2009

    great poem love it it was very sweet full of love.
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    Dreamer123 commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    AWWWW!! this is so sweet and alot about teenage love affairs. keep up the great work girl! you rock! :D made me wonder. thanks for sharing.
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thank you dreamer. I am soon puting more poems on. but you should check them out. i will write you or something.? ((: --bush

    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thank you dreamer. I am soon puting more poems on. but you should check them out. i will write you or something.? ((: --bush

    Dreamer123

    07/20/2009

    :D I'm glad I will write more as well

    sk8ergirl commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    cool teenage love great write. keep writing and i like the feeling
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Ohhh tnankss. you keep writing too.. ha

    Troubador commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    Teenage love what a concept the emotion is well detailed in your words. The poem is better constructed than the other one you used punctuation, yay! I have a problem with incorrectness when it comes to the use of elipses when it is mispelled so to say ... 3 dots not four or seven as you have used. I also think that you could have used a stanza break in between But will we really last forever? and Are we really meant to be? However, I do not discount the emotion that this piece conveys. I will give this poem a higher ranking on account of you used punctuation.
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Well thanks troub.. .I really like your advice.. Its okay everyone has pet peeves.. haha for example i dont do names with out a caps. Idkk.? but thanks..

    Jene commented on You and me Meant to be.?

    07-20-2009

    awww that i love poem thats so sweet you really felt that way about him. he means a lot to you lol. great job dear!
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    bushnell1993

    07/20/2009

    Um.. Well Thank you actually yea i kinda did. lol he was adorable.. lol Im going to be putting new poems on soon.. you should check them outt.

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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