“I am looking for Miss Wright”

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    “I am looking for Miss Wright”

    I am looking for Miss Wright

    Today,

    I will no it’s her when she

    Takes my breath away,

     

    I will look all over the world

    For her starting today,

    There is no prerequisite for

    Love I say,

     

    Love 101 is the first class in a

    Long sequence starting the day,

    You fall in love for

    always,

     

    And my class ends here

    Today,

    Because you take my breath

    Away.


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    am2anangel commented on “I am looking for Miss Wright”

    06-27-2009

    I'd like to offer some constructive criticism without coming across offensive. Although the feeling and content of your poetry is deep and full of compassion. the use of today, and breath away is a bit over used in your poetry. I hope you don't take this the wrong way. I do like your ideas and concepts. It's just a bit over much when the same product is apparent in all of your works. I occasionally get on a rhyming kick; which truly there is nothing wrong with. But, I also try to change it up occasionally and try to make my point without rhyme and see what shows up. Even so, maybe finding different phrases to rhyme and play around with would be interesting. You have a great passion and I feel yearning to express yourself through words. I'm just offering my feed back do with it as you will.
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