Ancient Tree

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May we all reach this time with such peace, solace.

Ancient Tree

His hair is white, brittle-dry;

Cataracts, soon to claim one eye,

Facing terms he can’t deny,

As autumn faces lull.

 

Winds that swirl the dead leaves up,

Myriads of moons fan abrupt,

Un-parched he holds his empty cup,

Yet drinks from fountains full.

 

The crooked staff he holds in hand,

Will read this path of familiar land,

Traversing this he understands,

Journeys kept before.

 

When lungs elastic fed the pace,

Springing tendons, then he raced,

With quicker turns he left no trace,

With forest’s first explore.

 

He arrives then at the ancient tree,

That grew so tall in woodlands free,

Where suns would rest on canopy,

In patience, light his way.

 

Looks then, so high above,

Where he had carved her name in love,

Smiles when he’s reflecting of,

Him kneeling on that day.

 

He pauses, then returns to fend,

The voyage toward the river bend,

Where life begins and life must end

If truth remains sublime.

 

His pack is his, with nothing lent;

No ills or hatreds to repent;

Contented men fear discontent

As he walks, in hand, with time.

 

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connsk8 commented on Ancient Tree

07-17-2009

This is beautiful, I couldn't help but think about my Dad and how he once was and will forever be remembered as my hero, now in a nursing home but you brought all the magic back, thank you...

laydbak1 commented on Ancient Tree

07-10-2009

I wanted to read one of your pieces before I left for a while today... You mentioned being a songwriter, so I pulled this first one up, picked up my guitar, and just played and sang it as a first take on it... The title and length of lines suggested a finger style ballad, so I just took off from there... The cadence is okay for a 3331 lyrical phrasing, rhyming is somewhat forced in places, but works, and the meter is off requiring make up syllables here and there, but overall it played through quite nicely and sort of reminded me in depth of content to a very heart-felt, tear-jerking kathy matea piece... A good write...

laydbak1

07/10/2009

As to this piece's content, it's a very nice story... It's not hard to see the imagery and imagine the old man returning to the place he took on his loved one, and knowing his time is nearing to go join her again... A well-crafted, sentimental piece and a good read...

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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