As I close my eyes to write......

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    As I close my eyes to write......

    As the night falls upon the vented sky
    A new thought arises in the depths of my mind
    In darkness,the isolation yearns for sport
    My heart squeezed, contorted is a pleasure to me
    What causes the casualty of an allotted question?
    Perhaps the form of another in the deepest depression?
    My outlook is bitter to the end of a day
    The night formed, delays, to a poet at bay
    As she write upon a grave, desecrating remains
    I remain lost in my dream-scape, simple and plain.

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    Altair commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    04-24-2010

    another masterpiece dream, and yet another format to your expression. Why o why do you only have three poems, you have mastered a craft, perhaps you wait to flood the site with a deluge of colors, you are awesome. this poem digs deep into the mind of a poet as she yearns to create a new piece, and in the process, ventures off into the distant yet nigh surroundings. Love it

    dreamscape

    04/24/2010

    You cannot imagine my joy when I noticed you commenting on my poems...thank you so much for stopping by and blessing me with your wonderful insight and compliments...

    jademelissa74 commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    03-22-2010

    At face value, this holds much depth in itself, as if there was a hidden message behind it. A true metaphorical piece with a rhyming flow. You are very talented. I have really enjoyed this piece. Indeed, provocative!

    dreamscape

    04/23/2010

    why thank you Jade, your comments are soothing =)

    MalikPeterson commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    03-18-2010

    the descriptive language in this piece is strong and I harp upon your imagery again...because...I like to see a piece as I read it. When its images jump off of the page and pull me in...that is when I know that kudos are in order :)

    dreamscape

    03/18/2010

    =)

    DeepEclipse commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    02-26-2010

    I like poems like this that keep a steady rhythmatic tone. To me it speaks in a morbid way, but still holds the prize of its imagination. Like a hand that has lost all feeling except how to write. So it writes on everything it sees with everything it feels.

    UnoMono commented on As I close my eyes to write......

    02-24-2010

    This poem is good. I applaud the descriptive tone you set instanly. I saw the whole poem thru till the end.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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