Dreamin' Awake

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    Dreamin' Awake
    Dreamin’ awake

    The walls were closing in
    The floor boards were breaking
    The sky started falling
    The ground started quaking
    My hand’s started shaking
    I could feel it coming
    Some how I was a part of it
    There was no point in running
    Good, bad, and evil
    It really didn’t matter
    ‘Cause everything was real
    But now reality was shattered
    People started chatter
    The chatter turned to noise
    And with everything I gathered
    I still couldn’t hear a voice
    People scattered frantically
    The sky was turning red
    Everywhere there’s tragedy
    My hands upon my head
    All I knew was left to do
    Was open up my mouth
    And yell until my face turned blue
    But nothing would come out
    I took a breath
    I closed my eyes
    Everything went black
    A mental check
    I realize I’m lying on my back
    As I opened up my eyes
    It slowly came to seem
    I was back in real Life
    It must have been a dream

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    dahlusion commented on Dreamin' Awake

    10-08-2010

    Nothing like a damn good nightmare composed into a written piece that is as horrific as the dream itself: I was floating above your dream, watching it dig into your nerves, and it broke my light in to two pieces, one bright the other dark. Powerful! bravo!! Peace and Light, dah
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    Sydney commented on Dreamin' Awake

    10-08-2010

    wow, this was totally mental. and a mental torture too. something to stay away from. an excellent poem. thnx for sharing. Sydney
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    1LostGypsy

    10/08/2010

    Thankyou for your comment and cotribution. The world needs more deep thinkers

    ansari commented on Dreamin' Awake

    06-17-2010

    it was so horrific, i thought it was an earthquake reading it , felt glad at the end to know it was only a dream. very descriptive . I liked it. thank you.
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    bluskyinthenite commented on Dreamin' Awake

    06-12-2010

    Wow you have a good poem here. "'A mental check I realize I’m lying on my back" Slowly I start to come alive it was only but a dream. My eyes open wide to see blue sky ahead.
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    ObsidianOmen commented on Dreamin' Awake

    10-12-2009

    Wow, it seems like your referring to something that's come to pass in your life. I was moved by your poem, and have experienced moments of panic, or sharp realizations that have made the floor drop out from under me, so to speak. I liked it, well done!
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