Or

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    Derp. I have noooo ideaaa. I don't know how I should tag this? :3

    Or

     Kill me now
    Why prolong my pain?
    Kill me now,
    destroy my suffering.
    Kill me now,
    You'll be doing me a favor.
    OR, if you wanted,
    you could do something else.
    Hug me now,
    end every sadness in me.
    Hold me now,
    tell me it'll be alright.
    Kiss me now,
    Help me live.
    But whatever you do,
    make it last forever.

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    Flinker commented on Or

    10-14-2011

    Nice back and forth with the lines. I like the title, but I think you can get more out of the last line by making it more surprising.
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    LilliannaFenton

    11/06/2011

    True...I may fiddle with it a bit, thanks! (:

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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