HUH?

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    HUH?

     I was
    wondering...
    If you're wondering
    What I'm wondering
    When I think of you?

    I really
    wondered...
    Whether you wondered
    What I wondered
    About the things you do?

    You should be
    wondering...
    Why I'm wondering
    If you ever wonder
    Do you have a clue?

    No longer
    Do I wonder
    Why you  never wondered
    But...
    You're wondering now
    Why I'm through with you

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    abluesky commented on HUH?

    09-02-2013

    i am also trying to wonder what you were wondering when you were writing this piece...think u are great..may God give u more inspiration for more poems...love it
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    Chaos128 commented on HUH?

    10-20-2009

    A uniquely memorable composition. If I was a wise-ass (perish the thought), I'd say it's just... wonderful!
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    hattyej

    10/20/2009

    Thanks and I get it...wonder(ful)LOL

    SILKYTWEED commented on HUH?

    08-19-2009

    Wow, Great Write....I'm wondering if this is true to life write, but its so well put together it speaks with wisdom and assuredly there is no reason to wonder (smile)....Thank you for sharing!
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    hattyej

    08/23/2009

    Yes it was true life..thanks for reading and commenting...very much appreciated

    CaramelProse commented on HUH?

    07-30-2009

    That's right! There are a lot of people we'd love to say this to!
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    hattyej

    08/23/2009

    I'm sorry I took so long to respond but I deeply appreciate your comments

    RHPeat commented on HUH?

    07-22-2009

    What a grand poem. The one word line (but) doesn't work however. just bring the (you're) up behind the ellipsis. I almost feel that you could cut the last line. and change (but) (bet) (bet you're wondering now.) which would infer you are through with whomever. And leave more of an epiphany for the reader. but I do like the poem as it stands except for the (but) one word line. I do know you want the (oooo) rhyme however. A poet friend// RH Peat
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    hattyej

    07/23/2009

    thanks so much for the comment...and bet would fit nicely there

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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