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--the picture was drawn by Dawn Marie Black


If you were the stars, and I was the moon,

I’d hug you to make the darkness seem bright.

If I were a gardener, and you were a flower,

I’d put the sun above your delicate petals.

If I were the sea, and you were a fish,

I’d make my waters safe for you.

If I were the sky, and you were a cloud,

I’d make my vast body blue and clear.

If I were the wind, and you were the snow,

I’d let you fall to the ground with grace.

If you were a candle, and I were the flame,

I would never die out.

If I were a mountain, and you were the sun,

My peak would always touch you.

If. . . . .

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ginga commented on If


JACOB, I like what you did here with the word "if." Believe it or not I won the weekly contest with a poem titled "IF" and it was not one of my blockbuster poems, but a thinking outside the box style poem that the judges liked. You are writing maturely for a young poet. Keep up the good work. ginga



Yes, I read that one, very good! I thought the idea was so original and unique. It was a fun poem to read. A well-deserved win! Thank you for the kind words. Really. --Natalie.

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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