Old Man

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  • DominatePeace
  • is in a fairly crappy mood. Too many bums. Doesn't that tell you something?

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An old man. His companion.
Love.
It's pretty simple.

Old Man

Sitting in his rocking chair.
Shifting back and forth.
A humble look appears on his sadly aging face.
Each wrinkle tells a story.
Each breathe he steals has him closer over the hill.
His rocking chair stops.
He reaches for his cane.
His long face sits over his shadow.
A large, gray, misshaped figure, leaning.
A former young lass,
With a darling grin spread across her face.
She comes behind him, giving him a kiss on him head.
He seems happy.
With that,
He sits back in his rocking chair.
Shifting back and forth,
Still, a humble look,
Still his wrinkles.
Still his breathing.
And there his shadow lay.

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mufasa commented on Old Man

07-30-2009

Beautiful write ,I like the way you tell the story. Keep writing,I look forward to reading more.

connsk8 commented on Old Man

06-16-2009

Beautiful, what talent for such a young person and such an appreciation for an older person, good job, well written

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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