The struggle

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    The struggle

    The surface only tells one story
    But underneath there's more to say
    The surface only Speaks of glory
    But underneath is how well pay

    The surface wears the smiles and bows
    But underneath the ache will spread
    The surface makes sure everyone knows
    But underneath are the lies in the web

    The surface acts against salvation
    But underneath it rages war
    The Surface wants self preservation
    But underneath knows that there's more

    The surface doesn't want to struggle
    But underneath knows nothing else
    The surface lives off goods and riches
    But underneath there's no such wealth

    The surface will plant seeds in a bed of thorns
    But underneath will be choked out
    The surface doesn't show its true horns
    But underneath there is no doubt

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    am2anangel commented on The struggle

    06-14-2009

    very well written. in the first stanza should it be how we'll pay not well? just curious and not sure if it was a typo or not I only say this because I know I would like any errors in my work pointed out so I could fix it. this piece is very deep I enjoyed it. What I took from it was a struggle with inner demons. showing the world a different person on the surface. If this was the intent; you may enjoy my poem "all dressed up" I will look forward to reading more of your work.

    Robin commented on The struggle

    03-04-2009

    Nice... A war raging in and out... very, very good I really like this one...

    WordSlinger commented on The struggle

    02-28-2009

    I really like this, welcome to the site, and thanks for the friend request. WordSlinger

    bacar10 commented on The struggle

    02-26-2009

    It sounds to me like the surface is for the blind and underneath is for the real. I enjoyed this and it is poems like this that inspires my soul, music, and poetry. Keep me on my toes and stay true. Bless!

    Tray4 commented on The struggle

    02-21-2009

    beautiful truth there is no good in us all in ourselves

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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