The Warning - A Haiku


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    I haven't written a Haiku since high school - a long time ago! I have seen many of them on here and figured I would give it a shot. It was a lot harder than I remember - to say so much in 17 syllables is a challenge!

    The Warning - A Haiku

    The great calm jade sea
    Silently swells murky bath
    Casting its warning

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    MindNumbing commented on The Warning - A Haiku


    Haiku is so tough to write but so fun to read. I love this little gem ~ Great job!



    It was tough! But fun too. ty

    dahlusion commented on The Warning - A Haiku


    Such lovely poetic writing. Bravo!!! Peace and Light, Dah

    ginga commented on The Warning - A Haiku


    DAwn, I esp like these 2 words "murky bath" since one may ask murky with what? And there are 100's of answers. Cool! ginga

    gogant commented on The Warning - A Haiku


    Let's hope that the turbulent sea does give some kind of advanced omen of its power to be...............Very impressive.....................g



    It is so unpredictable! thank you kindly for your comment!

    WordSlinger commented on The Warning - A Haiku


    Nice, one day the see will wash us clean off the earth, and still sound so beautiful, ty WS



    Thank you WS! Yes, the ocean is a powerful and wondrous being!

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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