The Warning - A Haiku

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    I haven't written a Haiku since high school - a long time ago! I have seen many of them on here and figured I would give it a shot. It was a lot harder than I remember - to say so much in 17 syllables is a challenge!

    The Warning - A Haiku

    The great calm jade sea
    Silently swells murky bath
    Casting its warning

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    MindNumbing commented on The Warning - A Haiku

    03-30-2010

    Haiku is so tough to write but so fun to read. I love this little gem ~ Great job!

    dawnjyc

    04/01/2010

    It was tough! But fun too. ty

    dahlusion commented on The Warning - A Haiku

    03-23-2010

    Such lovely poetic writing. Bravo!!! Peace and Light, Dah

    ginga commented on The Warning - A Haiku

    03-18-2010

    DAwn, I esp like these 2 words "murky bath" since one may ask murky with what? And there are 100's of answers. Cool! ginga

    gogant commented on The Warning - A Haiku

    03-14-2010

    Let's hope that the turbulent sea does give some kind of advanced omen of its power to be...............Very impressive.....................g

    dawnjyc

    03/14/2010

    It is so unpredictable! thank you kindly for your comment!

    WordSlinger commented on The Warning - A Haiku

    03-14-2010

    Nice, one day the see will wash us clean off the earth, and still sound so beautiful, ty WS

    dawnjyc

    03/14/2010

    Thank you WS! Yes, the ocean is a powerful and wondrous being!

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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