Bitter Cold

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  • Death
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  • Sickness
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  • Survival

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    When the air is bitter cold I can hardly stand it.  I guess this is where I challenge the fight for my ongoing undiagnosed illness...we are getting closer, but it has been a tough road. 

    Bitter Cold
    For months that I have suffered
    My story must be told
    I stand in defiance
    But the air is bitter cold

    I have learned to be my voice
    Events yet to enfold
    I fight for survival
    But the air is bitter cold

    My body slowly dying
    Too young to be so old
    I face mortality
    And the air is bitter cold

    Too much has been left undone
    Sons hand in need to hold
    I question my demise
    Though the air is bitter cold

    I want to live forever
    I need to break the mold
    To make a difference
    But the air is bitter cold

    A something is not quite right
    For this they must be sold
    Beg for diagnosis
    But the air is bitter cold

    The sooner it is found out
    The treatment could be gold
    To save my life, my sons
    Though the air is bitter cold

    Fear to face the mystery
    But bravery is bold
    Will fight to live for him
    Even though,
    The air is bitter cold



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    jademelissa74 commented on Bitter Cold

    12-14-2009

    This piece has brought bitter memories after conquering a terminal illness, yet, it has also reminded me that there is a HEALING POWER that only the God above shares. It is a well-written poem. Thank you for sharing this touching piece with us. Love ya!
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    gogant commented on Bitter Cold

    12-13-2009

    Even on the warmest days, I'm sure the bitter cold can still be felt with a cursed malady that has no name. A well written poem by you, Dawn............................................................gogant
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    dahlusion commented on Bitter Cold

    12-13-2009

    This is a beautifully poetic write on the battle of illness: can feel and absorb your power to heal. Bravo!!
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    MarionYost commented on Bitter Cold

    11-30-2009

    I love this piece, very vivid and descriptive, Good luck with finding the problem all the best... -Marion-
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    Artie commented on Bitter Cold

    11-29-2009

    Wow!! - This is so well written, it takes us inside your struggle. Amazing piece - 10 from me
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