thoughless thoughts

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    first time writing a piece like this, had alot on my mind and this is what i got, please let me know what you think of it

    thoughless thoughts

    devout devotion....none

    humble honor..............lost

    nonmotivated motivation.....gone

    unhonest honesty.....................truth 

    rainless raincloud.............................empty

    lifeless life................................................still

    silent silence.............................................deafining

    teathered teather................................................slipping

    formed forms..........................................................crumbeling

    strong stronghold...............................................................defeated

    .........................thoughtless  thoughts mine ...................................

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    silentwriter commented on thoughless thoughts

    07-05-2009

    I liked the way you wrote that and I like the simple yet deep meaning behind it good job !!!!!
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    dvusdreams

    07/05/2009

    thank you very much

    livelong4life commented on thoughless thoughts

    07-05-2009

    The emptiness that lingers inside so few can hide though in so few words you can describe
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    dvusdreams

    07/05/2009

    thank you for reading

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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